California: The Hero

Read this story (i wrote it went i was 7 to 10) and make a comment of what you would like to see in this story.


One dark night 10 year old Jonathon James, 32 year old Sue James and 39 year old Mark James came out of the Mega City Cinemas and out of the black. A car was speeding down the road and killed Mark and Sue the horror filled boy, having the pain made by his parents' death, he made that as a memorial he would spend the rest of his life fighting the bad guys The James Clan was super wealthy so he was well equipped for his life's work. But before going on his fight against crime, he needed a name and disguise. Because his Clan was Christian he went with a cross and the name California because it was name of a Mythical Man

3 years later Jonathon was in Rock City east of Mega City for business meetings. A giant snake attacked the central of Rock City so mark got into his California costume and went to beat up the snake. Jonathon flew to the rescue to save some people from the bad snake and battled it. The giant snake was very angry and Jonathon fired a fire rock from his rock thrower at the giant snake and the giant snake died. A beautiful girl named Jane asked Jonathon for a date and he said, “Yes. Come for a date. “She said, “Oh, yes.”  Then they went to have their date at a restaurant. They had a great time. Jonathon and Jane asked God to tell them if they can have a wedding. God said, “Yes you can.”  They asked God about the guests. They were going to Faith Zone where Jonathon grew up. They were having their wedding there. They had an excellent wedding and lots of presents and food. They thanked god. The next week they went to England on a ship for their honeymoon. It was called SOS.  When Jonathon and Jane are returning from their honeymoon in New York was a giant scorpion. IT was attacking New York. Jonathon heard the news. This is the news’ today there is a giant scorpion in town. We need a hero!!!’ Jonathon with Jane battled the giant scorpion and the whole of New York was throwing knives. The giant scorpion was very angry. Then Jonathon fired a fire rock from his rock thrower at the giant scorpion and it died. Then the TV people, fire brigade, police and the ambulance came. Jonathon and Jane saves day. Then the people of New York called them “California and Florida”. Jonathon had found an old car by the shed at his in-laws’ house. He asked dad about the car. He said, “Yes you can take it “Jonathon took it home. He was working on it when Jane came in she said, “The car is a beauty” Jonathon said,” It is. It is finished. It is called super car” Another day later California, Florida and super car were in Las Vegas. The are looking for tab mow. Why are they looking for tab mow because they found a name on a wall and who is tab mow? He is a bad man. They are looking for him in the caves out side Las Vegas in the caves they found a map. California and Florida found the main gate to Tab bow’s cave but California and Florida saw the secret entrance. They went in and saw Tab mow but Tab bow saw him. Tab bow called his guards but California and Florida ran outside. And super car and went to the police station and the police arrested tab mow, his people and guards. And Tab mow was in court. The judge asked Tab mow ‘why did you make bad choices’ Tab mow replied ‘California told me to. California interrupted ‘I did not’ Tab mow replied ’you did.’ California replied ‘I did not’ the judge shouted ’STOP!!! Tab mow you are going to jail for life because you lied but you can go home to pack your bags. Jonathon and Jane were coming home it was dark when they got home and went to bed. It the morning Jane was pregnant. A baby came out it was a boy. They called him Rex. Another morning later Jane was pregnant and a girl came out. They called her Sarah. Rex got very happy. Jonathon and Jane were very happy too. Tab mow escaped jail. Jonathon, Jane, Rex, Sarah and super car went to get him back in jail. Rex and Sarah thought Tab mow was hurting California so they beat Tab mow up and he fell into the sea and died. Then they had a party. One day on the news they said a big robot man was destroying the town. So California, Florida, Mexico and Canada and super car went to stop it. It had guns, lasers, bombs, missiles and explosives. Just then super car shot a missile at the big robot man and it blew up. One day Rex found a lost dog so he toke it home they all called it Texas.